In ch 2, the last sentance starts with " I only the others arrive soon". shouldn't the word 'hope' be in between 'only' and 'the' to make it sound better?
Also, a bit before that you wrote "........be, I’d rather there were separated from us." Wouldn't 'they' make more sense than 'there'?
Also, while it does tell us a bit about the other countries, I become curious to exactly what the history, tech levels vs magic level, social cast, and governments of these places. Will all this be answered in upcoming chapters as the book progresses?
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Sat Jun 21, 2008 12:55 am
